Ok let's see. I have this sequel I have to write, (hope there aren't any copyright issues), on the Iron Giant. Darn. I have no inspiration for it. I have 2 Chemistry worksheets, and three answers to the same no. of Chinese Lit questions to memorise. Darn again.
Here's a short excerpt of my own story, called Familiar Summer. It started out as a short story in Sec 2, but over the months I've lenghtened it. So read it and anyone interested please give me some comments! I'd like to know what others think. I think it's dangerous writing a story for the first time without seeking some reader's-opinion. So thanks!
Excerpt...
I glared fiercely at him, and he returned my gaze, confident and cool. Then he let his breath go in one smooth flow of white air.
“He has been in there for a long time, and I do think he would be pleased to see his kin after so long,” his cool voice drifted across the table, and I looked up in surprise. I frowned, and then a thought hit me like a huge wave, cascading over me and filling my mind.
“My father! You have him!” I cried, unable to remain silent this time. It was his turn to stare coolly and silently at me. “You do! Don’t you?” His eyebrows climbed a notch higher.
“And if I do…?” His voice trailed off ominously. I was stunned, first by the shocking revelation, and then because I knew what I could not have.
Hot anger stirred up in me, and I could feel my heart leaping up to my mouth, my face flushing with colour. For a long while nothing was said between us, and the sound of my breath flowing rapidly in and out broke the silence of the cold frosty air.
“The bonds of the Primera family are strong, I see, for you to have felt his presence so quickly and definitely. To think he has spent so long in there without giving hope, dreaming of his family. Why, my heart even feels for him.”
I looked up once more, reluctant yet compelled by my curiosity for the truth. Behind his cold blue eyes, did I see real sympathy? The expression quickly passed, and I assured myself I must have been thinking too much. An ice heart could not contain any warmth.
“So it is true. Please, let me see him.” The quiet words were out of my mouth even before I knew it. He said nothing at first, and only looked straight back at me with his inscrutable eyes.
End of excerpt.
I would be ever so grateful for any CONSTRUCTIVE comments. ^_^
nee TORABURU mo nayami mo
zenbu anata ni wa hanaseta
Ah juwaki no mukou gawanukumori o kanjiteta
I realized it isn't good to be always telling others, especially those close to use, all our troubles. Because as much as they want to help, they're human too, so they have their limitations, and sometimes they aren't always able to bear the burden because their own yoke is too heavy. So I guess I'll have to learn to deal with them myself. Oh well.
The end of Sec 4 approaches. Time flies.
O levels is in 5 months. Time crawls.
Dokomademo tsuzuku michi ni wa
Ironna koto arunda ne
Tsuyogari na kimi ga kyou wa
Jiwaki goshi ni namida goe
I've left so many people, so many friends, so much laughter and experiences behind me. I'm glad I don't have to let all of them go, even though I have to except that they've changed. Change is natural. I can handle that.
Itsumo wa suki ja nai natsu dakedo
kotoshi wa mou sukoshi nagakute mo ii na
I guess it would be great if this time of the year could last a little longer, before we all have to say goodbye. Once upon a time I couldn't imagine studying two years with you people; now I can't see my life being any different from now.
Strange, isn't it?
